This part of chapter one made me realize that I had no log line, although those are generally reserved, so I thought, for fiction work:
The end goal of this project is to create a community and a plan that would implement all four of President Roosevelt’s stated freedoms, in a phased-in program that builds a movement across the next sixty to eighty years.
What do you think, Thoughtful Readers?
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Ah, the dangers of outlining and writing without referring back to what’s already been written as you go!
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Ugh!! I have cut 25 pages, so far!! I cannot believe the amount of redundancy I had in different chapters! Thanks to Violet for telling me! I think that from having written so much about these ideas over the years, especially since 2014, I keep forgetting what is in my various blog posts, and what is in which chapter, so that everything always feels familiar as I read through my draft. Looking at it as if it were a fiction work, for some reason, helped me to see the draft in a fresh light.
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Reblogged this on Ned Hamson's Second Line View of the News.
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Thank you, Ned!
Shira
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I like the log line.
I don’t really mind, if things are mentioned several times, not in a book like this in any case, because there are so many ideas and new expressions that a recapitulation can come in handy.
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Thanks, B.!
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Oops: I’ve now removed quite a bit of material, while hoping to keep the essentials. All of chapter 6, and much of the Preface, Intro., and Chapter One. I’ve tried to be sure not to remove anything entirely, but I’ve also been creating blog posts out of some deleted material. I hope that you’ll be willing, if you have time and can stand another read, to give it another gander when Draft 6 is done, but I’ll certainly understand it you can’t!
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I will, no problem! Just let me know, when it is ready.
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Coolness, thank you!
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Chapter One now ends on Page 36!
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This is more like Back Cover Copy than a log line, which should stay below 15 words, in general.
The new title may make a better log line: Enough for All in 70 years?
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Thank you, Empath.
Shira
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live to serve…
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