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Last Early Draft Outlines: the later years of Phase III

This post is, though the book is now done,  the rough draft of  Chapter 10, section III. A. of my non-fiction WiP, Baby Floors.   This part of chapter 9 will introduce the later years of mapping out a path to get there for Phase III.

The overall objective remains that of putting a floor on poverty so that each and every baby born can have a safe childhood.

I was posting rough draft sections in order to compare with later drafts, but now I see that posting too much of the rough draft is just tiring, so this will be my last, unless I have scheduled some that I may miss.   I’ll be concentrating on drafting my novel in progress, Who By Fire, so this may get lost, and I ask your indulgence, Thoughtful Readers, if it does.

 

Once again, by way of disclaimer, the overall goal is now to explain why we need both equ. + justice, & why in 4 phases.  This chapter is part of showing what Phases I-IV could look like as potential roadmap for a fully inclusive society for all of us.  This vision is laid out in the hope that All HumanKind  will eventually have each person’s basic needs  met, without taking anything from anyone, and without violence, intimidation, nor coercion of any kind. 

(Chapter 10, section II. D. was last week)

Chapter 10, section III. A.

 

— (Next Wednesday: Chapter 10, section III. B. )

 

I’m considering this Rough Draft as the block of clay from which my book will eventually emerge, obviously, and some ideas for phases III and IV are still becoming more  fixed in my mind as I write, so the final version will likely look pretty different from this Rough Draft, and will need updating once I get to the very end.

 

And once again, yeayyy( !!)with regard to audience, I may have at least a couple of comps:  Walden Two meets The War on Poverty: A Civilian Perspective (by Dr.s Jean and Edgar Cahn, 1964).  I know that lots of people consider Skinner’s writing to be stilted, but I like the tilt of most reviewers, in that the idea is that a community should keep trying policies that members agree upon until they find what works for all of them.

As for genre, I’m still wondering:  clearly part of  Non-fiction.

Maybe also: System Change, Causes, maybe even Inspirational, but I doubt it.

Action Items:

1.) Consider sharing some ideas you may have on how our society can solve homelessness and child abuse, starting right now,

2.) Write a story, post or tweet that uses those sources and your thoughts.

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B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/Protector,  Lupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

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The Writing Is Done, The Umbrella Project Has Begun

     I have finally published the Do Better manifesto as a manual for community organizers looking for a long term plan that they can modify for their own communities, and use to work together with other projects and communities to help build a unified movement for the Common Good.
     The book,  Project Do Better: Enough For All, in Four Phases, comes in various sizes of PDF, as an epub, and as a mobi file from the stores that would allow me to set the price to Free, meaning that Amazon and the library systems, which require a minimum price well above that, did not allow me to publish through them.  Note that I personally prefer the ePub, since most PDF readers on the phone are not capable of showing the thumbnails or bookmarks that bring up the left hand side Table of Contents in the published PDF, so if reading it on a mobile phone without an eBook Reader, one may prefer the draft 9 pdf, which has the Table of Contents inside the document (but it looks much better using the left side tab, in a desktop PDF reader).  I can download and send about 20 different sizes of PDF if needed, and copies are currently available:
    Draft2Digital says that the distribution will shortly also include Smashwords, so that should also make the epub and mobi versions more easily accessible in a few months or so.
    I still need a logo for the project, and help with getting the word out about this project, from all willing hands.  I plan to start sending a copy of the book to each person cited in the notes, page by page, and then to look for communities and organizers who might be interested in collaborating with the project, or using the book as a starting point for their own long term planning.  I will happily send the editable version of this book to communities wishing to modify it and publish their own versions of this plan.
Thoughts, Fellow Writers?
Shira

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B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli Annem, Lupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

Shira

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Do Better Writing Process, and Rm’d Non Sequiturs

  This was a section that an early Rough Draft reader noted did not go with the rest of that paragraph, or part of the chapter, rather, so I reluctantly removed it.  It was part of the Preface, I believe, or maybe the Introduction.

(                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                        …Like Noam Chomsky.

Chomsky and others have written many books and articles detailing a variety of critiques of US and other current societies, in terms of the damage that governments of the United States and other developed nations allow to be done in the name of economic competition.                A just society must be just for its own citizens, and must also promote the ideals upon which it is founded in its dealings with other societies.                On that basis, Chomsky finds that US treatment of other nations is especially unjust, and that injustice is a reflection of treatment withing US society of the most vulnerable communities within US society, as well, such as Black Americans, refugees, and women of all races.                So, the treatment of citizens within a just society must also be mirrored by how that society treats those outside of its boundaries with whom it has dealings, as Chomsky points out on page 83 of his book Profits over People: unfairly vilifying and then crushing a nation for the sake of economic competition is unjust not only to those outside of a society, but even to those within the ‘winning’ society, as the reality of such behavior is evident even to small children, when viewed without the coloring of propaganda.                The effects within US society, for example, of the embargo against Cuba over the long term, have been to harden views in some quarters against any compromise or opening of discussion on the topic, while others in American society have come to see hard-liners insistent on the embargo as both anti-Cuban and even anti-immigration.)

   Draft 8 is done, and as of Friday, July 1st, a logo is needed for the project that can also be edited to act as the book cover for this manifesto.  Suggested images in the Public Domain are most welcome, whether drawn by yourself, Kind Reader, or an already existing PD image.
Shira

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli Annem, Lupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

Shira

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Do Better Wednesdays, Writing Process, & How looking at My Nonfiction Through Fiction Writing Eyes Improved Draft #Six


    The later drafts, 4th, 5th, and later, of a book can be exhausting (and now I’ve done Draft 7...), and it is tempting to want to just publish and be done.  I found, personally, that looking at my book, at that point, as if if were one of my fictional works, even a short serial story/novella, like Ann & Anna, helped:  I suddenly saw just how much could be cut away to make even the Table of Contents more interesting, and the entire book more readable, despite being in an entirely different category of writing.

I hope that this helps in your writing process, Thoughtful Readers.

Shira

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B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, or Casa de Papel/Money Heist  Lupin Reviews

Holistic High School Lessons,

           or Long Range Nonfiction, or Historical Fiction

Thoughtful Readers, if you remain on Twitter, please consider following   #Project Do Better  on Twitter.

Shira


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Draft 8 is Done, Project Do Better Needs a Logo

     Any ideas for a logo (the book is complete) for this project would be most greatly appreciated, and I’ll be delighted to upload the final  pdf of Draft 8  if anyone wishes to do a quick Beta Read for me before publishing.  This book, based heavily on the work of Eleanor Roosevelt and the words of her husband FDR, manifests the policies and aims of Project Do Better.
       Any help with picking a  Project logo from the public domain commons is greatly appreciated, Thoughtful (Beta??) Readers.
Shira

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli Annem, Lupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

Shira

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Draft 7 Polishing Changes are Done

   I had proofed and made about 20 minor edits to the newly published book, all to polish the text, no content changes to the Project made by the edits, but more readable, and seems ready to publish, now, if anyone would like to read the 230 pages?
       I’ll be delighted to upload the final pre-pub. pdf if anyone wishes to Beta Read for me.
       Any help with picking a book cover or logo from the public domain commons is greatly appreciated, Thoughtful (Beta??) Readers.
Shira

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli Annem, Lupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

Shira

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Draft 7 is Ready

        And so is the book, now
Finally, Edits to draft 6 are done, draft 7 is ready.
       I’ll be delighted to upload the pdf if anyone wishes to Beta Read for me.
    I look forward to your impressions, Thoughtful  Reviewers.
Shira

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B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli Annem, Lupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

Shira

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Writing Process: 6th Draft Edits Done, Beta Readers and Logo Needed!!

           At last!   The #ProjectDoBetter Manual is now published, and freely available to all.   I was in final proofs of the text of Draft  #6  of Project Do Better’s manifesto,  so let me know if you want to read this 6th Draft and I will post it!

     I look forward to hearing your opinions, Thoughtful Readers.

We can really  Do Better.

-Shira   

 

Action Prompts:

    Share your thoughts on how to build buy-in to create a more equal, or at least less inequitable, society, please.   Guest posts are always welcome.  Writing, by the way, is my personal contribution to Project Do Better

What would yours be, if you had time?

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan:Muhafiz/The Protector, Lupin, or La Casa De Papel/Money Heist Reviews,

Holistic College Algebra & GED/HiSET Night School Lesson Plans,

           or My Nonfiction  & Historical Fiction Serial Writing

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BsCs

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Writing Process: 6th Draft in Final Edit, Beta Readers Needed!!

           At last!  I’ve just finished Draft 5, and am now in final edit of the substantially revised Draft #6, which is rather different, even, from the 5th draft.   Now in need of Beta Readers, please!  In addition to a few idea changes, this draft  is 237 pages, rather than the 288 of draft 5.  (why is the editor so snaggy today?!)

     So, I continue to work on detail edits of draft #6  of Project Do Better’s manifesto, which should not be many as I was careful, but one always misses something, so do let me know of any and everything you see or think should be changed -just let me know if you want to read this 6th Draft and I will post it!

     I look forward to hearing your opinions, Thoughtful Readers.

We can really  Do Better.

-Shira   

Action Prompts:

    Share your thoughts on how to build buy-in to create a more equal, or at least less inequitable, society, please.   Guest posts are always welcome.  Writing, by the way, is my personal contribution to Project Do Better

What would yours be, if you had time?

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan:Muhafiz/The Protector, Lupin, or La Casa De Papel/Money Heist Reviews,

Holistic College Algebra & GED/HiSET Night School Lesson Plans,

           or My Nonfiction  & Historical Fiction Serial Writing

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BsCs

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Continue reading Writing Process: 6th Draft in Final Edit, Beta Readers Needed!!

We Can Do Better Wednesdays, Chapter 9, section II. D

This post is  the rough draft of  Chapter 9, section II. D. of my non-fiction WiP, Do Better, fka Baby Floors.   This part of chapter 9, 1/4 of a map for the early years of Phase III, will introduce the early years of a path to Empathy for All, via Phase III.

The overall objective remains that of putting a floor on poverty so that each and every baby born can have a safe childhood.

Outlines for chapter 9 will attempt to match with each section, at the bottom of early years posts.

Once again, by way of disclaimer, the overall goal is now to explain why we need both equ. + justice, & why in 4 phases.  This chapter is part of showing what Phases I-IV could look like as potential roadmap for a fully inclusive society for all of us.  This vision is laid out in the hope that All HumanKind  will eventually have each person’s basic needs  met, without taking anything from anyone, and without violence, intimidation, nor coercion of any kind. 

(Chapter 9  section II. C. was last week)

Chapter 9, section II. D.

II. D (1164/1k wds).  Early years of Phase III old tools for new problems

 

1 (275/250 wds).

The start of this part of Phase III, in synchronization with the other three parts of this phase, will perhaps be a bit easier in the very beginning, since we are taking old and familiar tools and adapting them for the current work at hand.  One familiar tool, at least to those interested in public participation in policy making, is the citizen’s jury.  With a more robust educational system in place at this point, some 35 years, give or take 5, since the start of our overall work on this project, more US citizens will be prepared with the empathetic critical thinking skills to address such issues.  Likewise, an old tool like the CCC can be updated and brought back in a form suitable to address the current needs of the nation, while teen or youth courts can likewise be added in more cities, as we learn to trust our youth to make reasonable decisions for their peers, and for us.  Monetary tools like 1930s stamp scrip, updated as with Ithaca Hours, or even Time Banks, are another set of tools that local communities can use to help implementing a variety of initiatives even where federal funding is scarce.  Finally, tools like PB, already used in places from Porto Alegre to Paris, should be updated for cities across the US, as our citizens become more accustomed to taking fuller part in the complex decision making of reviewing and contributing to budget agendas in their local communities.  All of these tools will need to be adapted for the local needs of each city in which they are used, by local residents who best know local needs.

 

 

2 (254/250 wds).

Measuring the progress, and the reaching of milestones for this part of Phase III, in the early years, will again involve volunteers from each community working together to decide on how to set such markers for their specific community, and how to coordinate time frames with other communities, assuming that this is still useful and viable for those communities.  The growing numbers of Teen or Youth Courts and increasing numbers of cases handled by them, can constitute the initial set of statistics, available for past years as public record, presumably.  Similarly, an increasing set of citizen’s jury studies can serve to indicate uptake of this tool, as can the number of state level versions of the CCC, as it is updated by community, and advocated for bringing back in modified form on the federal level.  The number of active local currency systems, by both community and by state, can be both tracked and aided by more established currency system organizers, such as those in Ithaca, NY, and Time Banks, USA and even Time Banks, UK, if they have returned to the egalitarian ethos of time banking as founded by Edgar Cahn.  Finally, some way of measuring the progress with introducing the idea of rotating teachers around states, and eventually around the country as many in Europe do, should be started, state by state.  Starting with basic numbers of school board meetings attended to introduce the idea, moving to numbers of lawmakers contacted via letter requesting introduction of the idea to their state legislatures, perhaps.

 

3 (345/250 wds).

The tools and 1-minute activities for the start of this part of Phase III will involve taking familiar tools, like voting related tools, and adapting or updating them for current needs and localities, community by community, but in coordination with the nation wide movement to update and share tools both within and between communities engaged in this project, and also with the wider public.  Ranked Choice Voting, aka irv, should, by this time, be in use across a number of states, as in Maine, NY, and California began even before 2021.  PB and Citizen’s Juries are tools that may need more education around their use, and thus more 1-minute activities to inform and promote them, sharing links and articles for where to learn how to use or adapt both of these ideas as needed, and to introduce them in cities where they are not already in use, moving gradually up to the entire state level, for both.  Family and local history archiving is another idea whose time ought to have arrived, by this time, as local library branches facilitate the writing and local publishing of books on community history, and of each family in that local community.  TheAbuelaVida project, begun in 2016, for sharing the stories of every person’s grandmother, should be spreading across communities and into local library branches as part of the local history books project.  Another old idea that could be revived to help reframe ways of thinking is the calendar reform project of the World Calendar, or also that of the Holocene Era calendar.  Resetting our reference year from 2021 to 12021, as proposed by Italian-American scientist Cesare Emiliani, could be one more way to help reset our ways of thinking to include all human beings as part of our frame of reference for human rights.  Finally, free language learning, with the encouragement of learning at least two, preferably three languages, each from a different language family whenever possible, is another important way of learning to see things from another point of view, and can be helpful to this project.

 

 

4 (259/250 wds).

The practical use of many of these tools may become more clear to more people after education around the need for those tools, as the Holocene Calendar, and how to use those tools work, as with RCV/irv.  Once people are familiar with what the various new or updated old tools can do, and how they work, their practical value will become clear.  Teen or Youth Courts, for example, apparently saved a good bit of money in the long run in terms of reduced recidivism rates in DC, according to Dr. Edgar Cahn’s remarks in 2011, but the lack of funds for long term follow up with those involved in this effort makes evaluating the benefits more difficult.  Thus, volunteers will need to be available, or interns, from the social science fields, perhaps, to continue on following up on the results of these projects with participants who have used each of the adapted tools over a period of as many years as possible.  The CCC, for instance, created jobs, educational opportunities, and infrastructure upgrades, and could well do so again.  Those are obvious practical benefits, but symbolic benefits also make a difference.  Cooperation, learning together, working as a team, all are symbolized by both youth judging their peers, and by youth working together in different parts of the country.  Local currencies, citizens’ juries, PB, all also symbolize cooperation and trust.  Calendar reform further even, symbolizes the building of more hope and new ways of thinking that will be needed more than ever to solve the world’s increasingly difficult problems.

 

— (Next Wednesday: Chapter 9, section III. A. )

I’m considering this Rough Draft as the block of clay from which my book will eventually emerge, obviously, and some ideas for phases III and IV are still becoming more  fixed in my mind as I write, so the final version will likely look pretty different from this Rough Draft, and will need updating once I get to the very end.

 

And once again, yeayyy( !!)with regard to audience, I may have at least a couple of comps:  Walden Two meets The War on Poverty: A Civilian Perspective (by Dr.s Jean and Edgar Cahn, 1964).  I know that lots of people consider Skinner’s writing to be stilted, but I like the tilt of most reviewers, in that the idea is that a community should keep trying policies that members agree upon until they find what works for all of them.

As for genre, I’m still wondering:  clearly part of  Non-fiction.

Maybe also: System Change, Causes, maybe even Inspirational, but I doubt it.

Prompts:

1.) Share some ideas you may have on how our society can solve homelessness and child abuse, starting right now,

2.)  Write a story, post or tweet that uses those sources and your thoughts.

   🙂

 

Chapter 9, both sections II and III D.  outlines

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, La Casa De Papel/Money Heist, & Lupin & Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector Reviews

Holistic High School Lessons,

Thoughtful Readers, if you are on Twitter, please consider following   #Project Do Better  on Twitter.

Shira