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We Can Do Better Wednesdays, old Chapter 10, and Community Land Trusts as part of Phase IV

This post is  the rough draft of  old Chapter 10, section III. A. of my non-fiction WiP, Do Better, fka Baby Floors.   This part will introduce the early years of mapping out a path to get there for Phase III.   Outlines will be matched, at the bottom of this post, with sections for both parts II and III of this chapter.

Note that Phase IV, discussed in detail in this chapter, goes very well with the use of a Community Land Trust, where land is held in common by a local community, in a shared ownership arrangement.  There are a few such trusts in California, at least.

The overall objective remains that of putting a floor on poverty so that each and every baby born can have a safe childhood.

 

Once again, by way of disclaimer, the overall goal is now to explain why we need both equ. + justice, & why in 4 phases.  This chapter is part of showing what Phases I-IV could look like as potential roadmap for a fully inclusive society for all of us.  This vision is laid out in the hope that All HumanKind  will eventually have each person’s basic needs  met, without taking anything from anyone, and without violence, intimidation, nor coercion of any kind. 

(Chapter 9, section III. D. was a few weeks ago)

Chapter 10, section II. A.

 

— (Next Wednesday: Chapter 10, section II. B. )

 

I’m considering this Rough Draft as the block of clay from which my book will eventually emerge, obviously, and some ideas for phases III and IV are still becoming more  fixed in my mind as I write, so the final version will likely look pretty different from this Rough Draft, and will need updating once I get to the very end.

 

And once again, yeayyy( !!)with regard to audience, I may have at least a couple of comps:  Walden Two meets The War on Poverty: A Civilian Perspective (by Dr.s Jean and Edgar Cahn, 1964).  I know that lots of people consider Skinner’s writing to be stilted, but I like the tilt of most reviewers, in that the idea is that a community should keep trying policies that members agree upon until they find what works for all of them.

As for genre, I’m still wondering:  clearly part of  Non-fiction

Maybe also: System Change, Causes, maybe even Inspirational, but I doubt it.

Action Items:

1.) Consider some ideas you may have on how our society can solve homelessness and child abuse, starting right now,

2.)  Write a story, post or tweet that uses those sources and your thoughts.

 

Chapter 10 outline,    II. and III. A.

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B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/Protector,  Lupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

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Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

 

Draft 7 is Ready

       Finally, Edits to draft 6 are done, draft 7 is ready.
       I’ll be delighted to upload the pdf if anyone wishes to Beta Read for me.
    I look forward to your impressions, Thoughtful (Beta??) Readers.
Shira

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Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

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Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

Shira

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The Writing Process, Editing eBooks, and Cars That Won’t Run, Dad?

So this is what a Karmann Ghia looks like, huh?

Editing this version of almost draft number seven reminded me of how I rescued, on a dare, an old Kindle from Oblivion as it was about to be recycled because a landlady of mine in New Mexico said it no longer worked. Not quite as good as getting a dead car to run, like my father used to do, but, it’s a start.    Apparently as they said in my father’s funeral, people used to give him old cars that wouldn’t run, and he would not only get them to run, but also supe them up and race them.    Nevertheless I was proud of myself that I got this really old Kindle to run, and have been using it for years now. I find that for some reason it makes a big difference editing in ebook format, where I usually do my edits, or rather, do my proofreading, in PDF format. Now I have found that I catch even more errors that I never spotted in the document or even in the PDF version, when I do the final read through on the eBook.  (Forgot to mention: I find that the best version comes from feeding the doc to Calibre for conversion to mobi format…)
I guess it’s a change of perspective, maybe it’s looking at it as my dad might have looked at it ?
He’s been gone, to that great garage in the sky, some might say, since July of 2007,  (after which time, an uncle told me that Dad, in High School, had actually wanted to become a photo journalist -who ever heard that idea about him?!)  but my memories of him working on the car, and reminding me to “engage brain before putting mouth in gear” remain.   And so does the legend of his old Karmann Ghia.
Thanks for the editing help, Dad.
Destinie
(now mostly known as Shira…)

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Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

Shira

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Writing Process: 6th Draft Edits Done, Beta Readers and Logo Needed!!

           At last!  I am in final proofs of the text of Draft  #6  of Project Do Better’s manifesto,  so let me know if you want to read this 6th Draft and I will post it!

     I look forward to hearing your opinions, Thoughtful Readers.

We can really  Do Better.

-Shira   

 

Action Prompts:

    Share your thoughts on how to build buy-in to create a more equal, or at least less inequitable, society, please.   Guest posts are always welcome.  Writing, by the way, is my personal contribution to Project Do Better

What would yours be, if you had time?

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B5, Hakan:Muhafiz/The Protector, Lupin, or La Casa De Papel/Money Heist Reviews,

Holistic College Algebra & GED/HiSET Night School Lesson Plans,

           or My Nonfiction  & Historical Fiction Serial Writing

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BsCs

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Do Better Wednesdays, Walk for Libraries Prompt

    Introducing a new prompt from the old chapter 7 (and the outline of old chapter 10’s Introduction…):  how would you start a daily ‘walk to our library’ group?

How many branch libraries do you have in your part of town, and how far a walk is the most convenient one for you?

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B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, or  Lupin Reviews

Holistic High School Lessons,

           or Long Range Nonfiction, or Historical Fiction

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Shira


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We can Do Better Writing Process: A Darling I Just Can’t Kill…

    I’ve removed chapter 6, but this line will have to stay in the book, somewhere, I hope (and I wish I’d seen the above featured image from Wikimedia Commons back when I was teaching essay writing, as I think my students would have liked it…):

Suffice it to say, here, that transportation is a
matter of both sustenance and sustainability, and thus is a key component of societal
infrastructure for many reasons, which must be supported robustly, through funding and through usage by all citizens.

How many bus stops do you have in your part of town, and how far a walk is the most convenient one for you?

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B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, or  Lupin Reviews

Holistic Algebra & High School Lessons,

           or Long Range Nonfiction, or Historical Fiction

Thoughtful Readers, if you are on Twitter, please consider following   #Project Do Better  on Twitter.

Shira


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Writing Process: 6th Draft in Final Edit, Beta Readers Needed!!

           At last!  I’ve just finished Draft 5, and am now in final edit of the substantially revised Draft #6, which is rather different, even, from the 5th draft.   Now in need of Beta Readers, please!  In addition to a few idea changes, this draft  is 237 pages, rather than the 288 of draft 5.  (why is the editor so snaggy today?!)

     So, I continue to work on detail edits of draft #6  of Project Do Better’s manifesto, which should not be many as I was careful, but one always misses something, so do let me know of any and everything you see or think should be changed -just let me know if you want to read this 6th Draft and I will post it!

     I look forward to hearing your opinions, Thoughtful Readers.

We can really  Do Better.

-Shira   

Action Prompts:

    Share your thoughts on how to build buy-in to create a more equal, or at least less inequitable, society, please.   Guest posts are always welcome.  Writing, by the way, is my personal contribution to Project Do Better

What would yours be, if you had time?

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B5, Hakan:Muhafiz/The Protector, Lupin, or La Casa De Papel/Money Heist Reviews,

Holistic College Algebra & GED/HiSET Night School Lesson Plans,

           or My Nonfiction  & Historical Fiction Serial Writing

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BsCs

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Do Better Wednesday Writing Process, & More Dead Darlings

    Yet another removal from Chapter Six as redundant: 

To build very small condos, eradicate hunger, and distribute basic life necessities to each newborn citizen and even resident, would not be very difficult, from a production, distribution, and resources perspective. We already have more than enough of each to provide several shelters, and abundant food to each person in the US. That is not the difficulty. The reason that we will need from fifteen to twenty years to arrange all of this new housing, food, and water distribution, in the nation with the largest GDP on earth, is the logistical and cultural work needed to make this possible.  Given the amount of food thrown out simply after purchase, let alone before arriving at market, simple rice, beans and greens for each local resident should take far less time to organize. Finding or building a room for each newborn citizen should be a simple task, given the resources in the US, but the reality will, of course, be far more complex. 

How many miles would you walk for something important, and what would that something be?

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Holistic High School Lessons,

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Shira


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Do Better Manifesto Editing: A Dead Service Darling

      Here is another paragraph that was redundant, repeated in Part II.    This paragraph comes from Part I describing the end of Phase III.   Just a reminder: Phase III should start somewhere between 45 and 60 years from now, so the end of Phase III runs about 60 (or 80) years from now:

             

     Some connected responsibilities might include volunteering to serve, as many Europeans do, in hospitals, nursing homes, or schools. A commitment to serve a rotation in some form of public service such as local or regional government, for example, could also be a Serving Adult responsibility. Each Serving Adult should be prepared to rotate, if called upon, into a limited time term of either Jury Duty, city, state, or federal level government duty as a local/state or federal Representative or Senator, Governor, or cabinet member. A system of sortition could gradually replace elections for the House of Representatives and state assembly lower chambers, followed by the upper chambers and executive level elected positions via IRV/Ranked Choice Voting, so that all interested citizens can serve, as the national educational system evens up in quality across the country.

 

 This suggestion is mentioned again, later, so it seems unnecessary to list here.  These Serving Adults could be part of the cadre that actually gets started via new CCC initiatives like that of California.  (I loved their old slogan:  ‘Long hours, low pay, miserable conditions -Join Now!’ )

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Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil

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Lesson Day 13, and Ratios of Sweat to Sorrow: “Refuse to Succumb…”

     This week’s lesson plan is Day 13/67: Five Month GED/HiSET, Ratio of Fact to Opinion, Adulting, and Discoveries?

   I continue to sweat over following Toni Morrison’s advice, rather than giving in to the sorrow of these recent days.  Her admonition reminds me that we have indeed been blessed with more hope than those who did their work from far worse places: 

“This is precisely the time when artists go to work. There is no time for despair, no place for self-pity, no need for silence, no room for fear. We speak, we write, we do language. That is how civilizations heal.”

     So, I continue to work on editing, because despite the pain of this world, “it is also critical to refuse to succumb to its malevolence.”

     I look forward to hearing your opinions, Thoughtful Readers.

We can really  Do Better.

-Shira   

 

Action Prompts:

    Share your thoughts on how to build buy-in create a more equal, or at least less inequitable, society, please.   Guest posts are always welcome.  Writing, by the way, is my personal contribution to Project Do Better

What would yours be, if you had time?

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan:Muhafiz/The Protector, Lupin, or La Casa De Papel/Money Heist Reviews,

Holistic College Algebra & GED/HiSET Night School Lesson Plans,

           or My Nonfiction  & Historical Fiction Serial Writing

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BsCs

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