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Writing Process Wednesdays, and An Abysmally Planned Novel

This is the set of ideas I had to rush to get down, which is taking a third year, now, to get written.    whobyfireiwilltmpcover

Also, trying to put too many scene notes in too many spreadsheets and online reminders, as well as on paper, is not helpful!

Shira

Action Items:

1.) Share your thoughts, please.

2.) Write a story, post or comment that uses those thoughts.

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli AnnemLupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.  This novel is my personal way (as opposed to founding the Project, overall) of contributing to building tools that can help increase empathy and compassion in our world.  Story, as part of how we see our world, helps us make sense of and define our actions in this world.  Let’s Do Better.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

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Writing Process Wednesdays, and A Not Well Enough Planned Scene

I left my notes a little too sparse on this scene, and had trouble after about half way through, while writing the preliminary rough draft scene.  whobyfireiwilltmpcover

This scene draft would have benefited from knowing two of my characters better, before starting to write the scene, so I ended up drafting it and then noting that I will certainly have to redraft both the scene itself, and connected scenes that mention certain characters.  But, my main goal was to firmly introduce (as opposed to merely dropping the name of) one of my major characters, before the end of Act I.    I am glad to see that the character languages work I did earlier, getting to know which languages the main chars would like to learn, and why, made it far easier to move from the previous scene into this scene.

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Shira

Action Items:

1.) Share your thoughts, please.

2.) Write a story, post or comment that uses those thoughts.

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli AnnemLupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.  This novel is my personal way (as opposed to founding the Project, overall) of contributing to building tools that can help increase empathy and compassion in our world.  Story, as part of how we see our world, helps us make sense of and define our actions in this world.  Let’s Do Better.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

ShiraDest

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Review of Write Away: One Novelist’s Approach to Fiction and the Writing Life, by Elizabeth George  

    I got this book from the DC Public Library years ago, when I began working on my first terrible practice novel, I think, in 2012.  This known literary fiction novelist, and extreme outliner, gives much advice on planning and editing a novel.

    Again working through her character-building worksheet while re-reading my notes on how to plot the book, write scenes, and set the theme via the Main Character’s Core Need and pathological maneuver. Excellent advice, if not so easy to follow (especially during NaNoWriMo!!).

Shira

Action Items:

1.) Share your thoughts, please.

2.) Write a story, post or comment that uses those thoughts.

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli AnnemLupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

     Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.  This book review, and my novel writing, is my personal way (after Project Do Better, obviously) of contributing to “the work” Toni Morrison spoke of that could help build empathy and compassion in our world.  Story, as part of how we see our world, helps us make sense of and define our actions in this world.  And remember how important story is also as part of this project.

Let’s Do Better.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

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Writing Process Wednesdays, and A Well Planned Scene

I changed my notes to  this scene card quite a bit before writing this scene only twice before putting it into my rough draft.  whobyfireiwilltmpcover

I guess that is progress.  I went back, after writing some character journals for Is. (he hates being called that) and Martin/Meir, once I had a better idea of their relationship.  A bit like the Mentor in the Hero’s Journey, but not quite.  Updating this scene card several times made it a mess, but helped, when drafting the preliminary scene.

SusAndRabbi

Shira

Action Items:

1.) Share your thoughts, please.

2.) Write a story, post or comment that uses those thoughts.

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli AnnemLupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.  This novel is my personal way (as opposed to founding the Project, overall) of contributing to building tools that can help increase empathy and compassion in our world.  Story, as part of how we see our world, helps us make sense of and define our actions in this world.  Let’s Do Better.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

ShiraDest

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Writing Process Wednesdays, and A Difficult Scene

I had this card to guide me, but still ended up writing this scene three times before putting it into my rough draft.  My hero keeps changing voice, so the prelim rough draft keeps changing along with it. whobyfireiwilltmpcover

The difficulty was in knowing how each of the characters either in the scene, or mentioned in the scene, would react to events, ongoing and earlier, and why.  This tends to evolve during the drafting process, so I keep a character journal for each main character, which I end up having to update rather often.  IsaiasPicPg

Does it help?  Sort of.

Shira

Action Items:

1.) Share your thoughts, please.

2.) Write a story, post or comment that uses those thoughts.

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli AnnemLupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.  This novel is my personal way (as opposed to founding the Project, overall) of contributing to building tools that can help increase empathy and compassion in our world.  Story, as part of how we see our world, helps us make sense of and define our actions in this world.  Let’s Do Better.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

ShiraDest

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Parashat Noach 5783, A short short Still emerging from song, and transportation

Stories are meant to transport us to other times and other places.  The audience for some of my more wacky story ideas, like this one, might need us to have a much more fully inclusive society for all of us.  I need someone to tolerate my short short trials!  🙂   Thank you for putting up with this one, if you read on…

I’ve had a song I grew up with circling in my head for days now, and also a story that I wrote, of which I posted a bit back a few years ago, as I pondered rewriting my first practice novel around this idea. What if some of the folks who didn’t get on Noah’s Ark stood outside the Ark as a way of protesting the injustice of destroying the entire world? I’m going to try this in 2nd person, to see how it reads: what do you think, Dear Reader?

The clear waters are lapping at her breasts. You can see the goose bumps on her flesh. The woman is shivering, looking right at you. She lifts her head, drawing a deep breath from her belly, and bellows these words out with her diaphragm:

“Soon and very soon,we are going to see the King!”

You’ve heard this song before, in a church, a long time ago. Now, the others join in, linking arms and responding to her call:

“Soon and very soon, we are going to see the King.”

The waters have reached the woman’s neck. You wonder what are they doing singing at a time like this. Then it hits you. Tears sting your face as you cry out to Shem, Japeth, and Ham:

“Get them in here! Now! Drag them by their idiotic hair if you have to, but get them in this boat! Right now! They …”

Your words are drowned out by the woman´s next call,

“No more crying!”

The others, lifting their voices above the waves, respond:

“No more crying there, we are going to see the king.”

You lung at the side, one foot already hooked over the edge, but your sons catch you by each arm, the third clutching your waist, dragging you back inside as Noach closes the door. The last thing you see is the writing on a plank of wood held high; demanding an audience with the One who sent this Flood. Demanding land for everyone, and justice for all.

The writing looked like blood.

So, it turns out that this short short, which I wrote in March of 2019, still comes to my mind fairly frequently (I suppose I should post it during Parashat Noah…).

Painters of Sultan Murad III [Public domain]
Painters of Sultan Murad III [Public domain] https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Noah%27s_ark_and_the_deluge.JPG

last year’s Parashat Noach 5782 / פרשת נֹחַ

was Read in the Diaspora on 9 October 2021 (3 Cheshvan 5782).

Parashat Noach is the 2nd weekly Torah portion in the annual Jewish cycle of Torah reading.

I still wonder if the idea of protesting the Great Flood could have happened, somewhere back in the mists of time.

Last week was Parashat Bereshit, 5783, and Language Learning for Novels and Torture Prevention?

Action Items:

1.) Share two different sources related to the Holocene Epoch and to the Holocene Calendar, as compared to the Hebrew calendar.

2.)  Share your thoughts on how knowing about different calendars might help, or hinder, inclusive thinking,

3.) Write a book, blog post or tweet that uses an alternate calendar, and once published, please consider donating to your local public library.

Dear Readers, ideas on learning, especially multiple #LanguageLearning, on-going education and empathy-building, to #EndPoverty, #EndHomelessness,  & achieve freedom for All HumanKind?

Support our key #PublicDomainInfrastructure  & #StopSmoking for CCOVID-19:
1. #PublicLibraries,
2. #ProBono legal aid and Education,
3. #UniversalHealthCare, and
4. good #publictransport

Writing Process Wednesdays, and Writer’s Block

So, I have finally experienced the dreaded block: staring at my WiP, words stumbling over themselves refusing to be put in order, and refusing to be put down on paper, much less typed into the word processor.

After a few minutes of agonized worry that this would take up valuable time, I reached for a sheet of scrap paper meaning to write a throw away paragraph, but instead, out came the sketch of the scene that you see featured above.

Did it help?  Sort of.

Shira

Action Items:

1.) Share your thoughts, please.

2.) Write a story, post or tweet that uses those thoughts.

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli AnnemLupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

ShiraDest

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Writing Process Wednesdays, Editing Out Passages, and Why Phase II?

     Story,  language learning, and continuing education, all connect vitally to our democracy.  This passage, I decided to edit out, for brevity, from the Do Better Manual.   Please read it in the format best suited to you, after re-checking your voter’s registration.   So many re-writes, even in a fully and meticulously outlined book.

Here is another page from an edited out chapter that might bear posting as a separate blog post:

“This combination of greater empathy and learning opens the way for a far greater understanding of the importance to society of the Public Health Service, and of universal access to at least a basic standard of health care. The Covid-19 global pandemic has thrown into stark relief both the increasing levels of inequality world-wide, and the dangers that that inequality, particularly lack of access to basic health care and disease prevention via basic water and sewage infrastructure, pose to even the well-off in this world. Universal access to at least some minimal level of health care acts as a safe-guard for all members of society. In like fashion, the empathy built by traveling and seeing with one’s own eyes how other human beings share the potential for creating new tools, given the time and resources, should lead to the realization that all human beings need and deserve access to the basic tools for survival. Only education and a basic income can provide that security at a local and regional level, which in turn generates increasing security at all levels. A Universal Basic Income, similar to what Dr. King called for, and universal free education, much like what is available to citizens of many European Union member states today, is a start. That start, toward shared tools and shared food security, energy security, and security of life, limb, and person, can move us forward to the ultimate goal: a world in which no human being need fear for lack of the basic necessities of life.

Phase II thus prepares a cultural space for the potential of new policies and even new forms of governance, by laying the groundwork for the initial sets of new policies in Phase III.                Shared learning never stops expanding. That expansion of knowledge and of empathy necessarily leads to new understanding. Some of that understanding includes the basic need for tools, which is what distinguishes Homo Sapiens from other animals, as we continually use our existing tools to develop new and more effective tools for the variety of tasks we face.                Naturally, it takes time to learn to use tools, and more time to develop new ones. Given the time, and the basic resources, each and every human being can and should contribute to the security and well-being of humankind. But such contributions require basic security: food security, energy security, and security of life, limb and shelter. The Community Serving Adults forged in Phase II will be equipped to help make that happen for all of us. Secure and confident Serving Adults realize that each person needs the time and the resources to contribute the energy needed to build new forms of governance, with buy in and consensus at all levels, from local to global.               ”

It was initially part of a framing chapter that I decided, upon Beta Reader feedback, needed to be shortened, and later deleted.  But the chapter had a purpose, which had been to explain the need for each phase in it’s turn.  Specifically, the second phase in our 60-80 year sequence.

Shira

Action Items:

1.) Share your thoughts, please.

2.) Write a story, post or tweet that uses those thoughts.

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B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli AnnemLupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

ShiraDest

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Writing Process Wednesdays, Voice, and Character Pet Phrases

Voice is important for helping readers distinguish characters from one another in dialogue, and each main char having a unique pet phrase can help with that.  Little J’s (the son of our hero and his wife Lucy, still captive in MD…) pet expression came to me as I thought about other characters in relation to him.

Shira

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Action Items:

1.) Share your thoughts on choosing a PoV for a story, and how it can affect readers ways of seeing the world.

2.) Write a story, post or tweet that uses those thoughts.

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli AnnemLupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

ShiraDest

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Writing Process Wednesdays, Deciding PoV

Point of View is a determining factor in conveying the mood of a story, so here is how I outlined the various Points of View in my subplots for Who By Fire, starting with my hero’s wife..

The grids above show both who tells the story from what point of view, by subplot, and whose story each subplot tells.  I decided that I needed to make the voices of the various subplot narrators as distinct as possible, and some felt easier to narrate in 1st person than others, while I have always preferred close third for a full novel (even if I do seem to find 1st person far easier to write in, at least for a short story).

Shira

Action Items:

1.) Share your thoughts on choosing a PoV for a story, and how it can affect readers ways of seeing the world.

2.) Write a story, post or tweet that uses those thoughts.

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Click here to read, if you like:

B5, Hakan: Muhafiz/The Protector, Sihirli AnnemLupin, or La Casa de Papel/Money Heist Reviews

Holistic College Algebra & GED/High School Lesson Plans,

Thoughtful Readers, please consider reading about #ProjectDoBetter.

Shira Destinie A. Jones, MPhil, MAT, BSCS

ShiraDest

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