Update: -major changes have been made, & I have removed chapter 6, so please comment here if you wish to be a Beta Reader, and I will send you the latest draft (now down by 1k+ words from draft 5…). -Shira, Tues, 17 May ’22
Update for those who may be reading the 5th draft: I have made edits to both the Preface and the Introduction, after having finished the Beta Reader changes below. As of Wednesday, May 7th, I have made edits, up to p. 139, of the 5th draft. -Shira
I am looking at the feedback from three readers, thus far, and starting to put the comments together in terms of what I will change in the 5th draft of Do Better.
I still need suggestions on a book cover and/or logo for Project Do Better, and another Beta Reader or two, if they can give feedback in 2 weeks, would be most welcome, but for now, I am done compiling and updating for the comments I’ve gotten, and am beginning my own next edit.
(ps: as I see that the 5th draft post is getting to be long in the comments, Beta Readers, please feel free to start leaving feedback in comments on this post, if you prefer…):
Title & ToC:
While I like the current title (“Project Do Better: A Kindness Manifesto in Four Phases“), I agree that if equity seems to be the gist of this book, then perhaps a better way of expressing that should be worked into this title, if necessary. However, the catch is that this book is not really about equity, in my view. It’s about every person being assured of having at least enough. Equity would be nice, but I doubt that it is possible.
So, maybe: Project Do Better: A Safety for All Manifesto? –done
Each and every human being having enough food, water, basic private shelter, health care, and access to education, however, is absolutely possible.
Kindness, built through empathy over these phases, I believe can get us there, and further.
So, how do we craft a title that expresses this?
Table of Contents:
Also: what about changing the title of Chapter One to “Dreaming vs. Engineering” -Chapter 1’s subtitle could be changed to: “Introduction to the layout of this book” ??
Points from Readers:
Masha: -P. 9 change from “Backup Bedsit” to ‘other safe shelter, and community support’ with a name that is short enough to make sense and be catchy… (done)
Brigidt: -leave Backup Bedsit as is for lack of better word… (done as added note…)
Violet: -Noting that this project is not entirely chronological, the book, once released, will be available to communities in editable format for those who wish to rewrite or rearrange sections as a guidebook for their particular communities. Thus, a chronological arrangement of chapters is entirely possible, for those communities who want to use sections or use this book as a baseline for their community’s part of this project.
1.) Share your thoughts on how kindness (and story…) can help build equity, or not, and lead to safe housing for each and every person.
2.) Write a story, post or tweet that uses those thoughts.
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